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littledoglaughed ([personal profile] littledoglaughed) wrote2009-02-18 07:31 pm

Torchwood drabble: Baby Teeth

Title: Baby Teeth
Author: [livejournal.com profile] rustydog
Characters: Gwen, Jack
Rating/warnings: rated G; spoilers for 2x13 "Exit Wounds"
Note: Written for [livejournal.com profile] tw100's challenge #108, "slip of the tongue"



Jack found Gwen sitting at Toshiko's workstation, absently stroking the mouse, thoughtful.

"Miss her?" As if he had to ask.

"I'd never thought about Torchwood without them, Jack."

"Now everything reminds you." Jack nodded. "It's like a tooth."

Her look said he was mad.

"Okay, remember losing your baby teeth?"

Thinking that far back almost felt like the Rift was opening. Rocking her wobbly incisor, the tinny taste of blood, until... "The hole, I could never keep my tongue from feeling in that empty space."

"Not until the new tooth grew in, right?" Jack's eyes held hers until she understood.

[identity profile] topgeargirl2.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 01:53 am (UTC)(link)
very good

[identity profile] phoenix64.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 06:03 am (UTC)(link)
Just right.

[identity profile] hab318princess.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 07:22 am (UTC)(link)
wonderful way of looking at it

[identity profile] rustydog.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 12:37 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you.

[identity profile] rustydog.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 12:41 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you very much! :)

[identity profile] rustydog.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 12:44 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! This week's challenge has been so interesting.

[identity profile] fajrdrako.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 02:28 pm (UTC)(link)
Lovely. I like the notion of Jack remembering what he felt at the age of six. It's so true, how that experience stays with you.

I also like "memories of Toshiko" stories.

[identity profile] mad-jaks.livejournal.com 2009-02-19 09:19 pm (UTC)(link)
Awww that's a lovely analogy...

[identity profile] rustydog.livejournal.com 2009-02-20 02:44 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you!

In an early draft I had Jack asking if Gwen had ever had a tooth pulled and she hadn't, so he had to change his example. And she wondered if he ever had to worry about dental hygiene, and whether *he'd* had teeth pulled. But of course that was complicated and way too wordy. It remains true that Jack has to remember what it was like to lose a tooth. Those memories are in there somewhere.

[identity profile] rustydog.livejournal.com 2009-02-20 02:45 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you! (I'm a little afraid I'm relying too much on analogies, but it's a comfort zone when I'm a little uncomfortable with the prompt. :)

[identity profile] taffimai.livejournal.com 2009-02-20 05:38 am (UTC)(link)
That's very nice.

Also? Guess what I'm ushering for this weekend? This! (http://www.sig-online.org/littledog.htm)

[identity profile] rustydog.livejournal.com 2009-02-20 05:50 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you!

And hee! That's so cool. It sounds like an entertaining show, too. :)

[identity profile] mad-jaks.livejournal.com 2009-02-20 09:02 am (UTC)(link)
Don't you dare apologise - I like a good analogy - whether it's someone using one within the body of a story or the body of the story itself.

[identity profile] mad-jaks.livejournal.com 2009-02-20 09:04 am (UTC)(link)
*eyes your icon*
I want an icon that really does that - but only if it's *good* stuff.

[identity profile] taffimai.livejournal.com 2009-02-20 09:14 am (UTC)(link)
And can boil an egg at thirty paces whether you want it to or not? You'd have to stay away from hens; it's not pretty when they blow.

[identity profile] mad-jaks.livejournal.com 2009-02-20 09:16 am (UTC)(link)
er NO definitely not with the thing with the hen..

[identity profile] taffimai.livejournal.com 2009-02-20 09:26 am (UTC)(link)


Love that bit.

[identity profile] mad-jaks.livejournal.com 2009-02-20 09:29 am (UTC)(link)
http://mad-jaks.livejournal.com/tag/phobia

[identity profile] taffimai.livejournal.com 2009-02-20 09:36 am (UTC)(link)
Oh. Okay.

[identity profile] mad-jaks.livejournal.com 2009-02-20 01:46 pm (UTC)(link)
It's okay, you weren't to know :D